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Two children wander
Through worlds they don't know,
Playing hide-and-seek.

One is a boy and one is a girl.
The girl is a ghost who still stares through his eyes,
And her brother's a boy
Who can't stay awake.
Perhaps she's fed him poison,
An apple from all the fables,
Self-knowledge that grows on a tree.
Some may call her monster,
Some may say she's murdered;
But all she wants
Is the life she lost
Before she was even born...

Crisscross lines leave it all confused,
The question of who is who;
The mask is the maze, and every cut corner
Just leads to another wall.
The easy route is what she always seeks,
But she's forced to turn around.
Spinning her secrets,
And spinning in circles,
She can't seem to capture
A direction, one road,
So she claims there's no way out.

When they ask who she is, she smiles and lies,
Because that's what she's trained to do.
Her reasoning falls to shattered glass
When she admits that she's afraid.
Were it not for fear, these starless shoals
Would finally see some light.

The shattered glass makes misery's mirror,
A reflection remade by her own design.
She gathers pieces of her own soul, now broken,
In the hopes that it may be mended.
But she's half of what she should be,
And her stars will never shine
Without someone to set them awake and ablaze,
An image upon the waves...

For this is where she wanders,
The shores and shoals of starlight.
Her ghostly form ripples,
Sparkling like water,
As she stares through tearless eyes.
She's become so used to a starless sky
That her mind has drifted to darker lands.

But a whisper is carried
By a sudden gust of wind,
Neither warm nor cold,
Neither good nor bad.
It is simply meant to be heard.
And when she hears it,
Those words softly spoken,
Her eyes turn upward
Toward the starry sky...
She hadn't seen the stars,
But they'd been watching all along...

You are not forgotten,
The stars seem to say.
You have not vanished...
You are here in this world,
You exist in this world,
And we will never leave you...


So as she lies there, on starlit sand,
On the shores of starlight shoals...

The ghostly girl, who no one saw,
Can finally shed some tears.
My one hundredth poem on this site.
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SimplyExists Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student General Artist
The story in this is so beautiful and so sad. Well done on making such a fantastic work of art!i!

=^^= Simply Exists =^^=
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StarlightShoals Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for speaking so kindly of it... :aww:
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Arfaks Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Quite a 100th it is! Exquisite ^_^
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StarlightShoals Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you lots! ^_^
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Arfaks Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013
:)
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Writer
This is such a large piece full of emotion and intensity that it's hard for me to sit down and put it all together in a constructive sense. Which means that this is a very intriguing and thoughtful piece.
So, if you want me to, I'd have to get back to you on that. But know that it is a very engaging and mystical read filled with very interesting imagery. However, I personally liked the beginning parts more than the end. That is just my opinion, I wouldn't say it's a criticism. It's possible that, being someone who has just seen your work, the boy is probably a representation of someone, because if not, he seems to have only a small amount of importance. Nonetheless the themes and imagery are quite intriguing.

Some word/grammar thoughts:
"Some may call her monster"
Should it be "a monster"? Without it it seems to work in an odd sense, but I'm not sure if it's grammatically correct.
"The mask is a maze, and every cut corner/just leads to another wall"
This is just a word choice opinion. Instead of "wall", how about blockade? In my own opinion it's not as subtle but could be interpreted in the sense that there are more things preventing her from advancing down a path. A wall is still much bigger, more abrupt, and the like I guess. But I'm just thinking.
"You exist in this world, and we will never leave you"
A nitpick, I'm not sure if "we will never leave you" is required. I dunno. It could be worded differently to be more subtle maybe. I don't know. It does work but I think I'm just nitpicking.

I'm done.
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StarlightShoals Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Writer
Yeah, the poem is really more about the girl (me) than the boy. The boy doesn't really exist...but some may think he does...and the false validity they grant him is what gives him great importance.

(Yes, I realize that probably doesn't make much sense. I'm not exactly forthcoming on the issue... :giggle:)

"Some may call her monster" is a more archaic way of phrasing it. I'm pretty sure it works grammatically, but I won't blame you if you prefer it the other way! ^_^

Hm, "blockade"...that's an interesting suggestion. And I like your reasoning for it! But I think "wall" works better because it ties in with the previous imagery, "maze" and "corner". Even so, I'm really glad someone would think about these things! :D

Well, I have this tendency to believe no one will stay with me for long and I'll end up being betrayed. So that whole section with the stars was a way of...reassuring myself when it comes to my doubts, and maybe letting go of them. A lot of this poem makes obscure (and sometimes more obvious) references to earlier poems I've written. If you read some of them, you'll see that I have serious trouble trusting people, and I hardly ever cry...which is why the ending of this poem has such significance for me. That's why I made it the 100th poem. :)
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Writer
You're right, that doesn't make a whole lot of sense XD.

I'm not sure what you were intending with him, but I'll leave that up to you since you know what you're doing. But from an outsider's perspective it seems a little... purposeless. Mostly. Sorry. :(

I can see that now. It sounded awkward at first, but it made sense after I made the comment. Of course it makes sense "after". X_X

Yeah, wall does tie in better. I was just spewing stuff off the top of my head, there wasn't really anything in particular otherwise. You have a good idea of what you're doing, don't let me bring you down.

That's very interesting. I think quite a number of people may feel that way. I didn't have a problem with the passage except for the "I'll never leave you" but it fits and it makes sense.
You hardly cry? I don't cry very much either...

100 poems? Dang, I've got a long way to go. Well, it's really cool you've done that much. I'm still starting out, haha XD
Well, I guess you've come a long way then.
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StarlightShoals Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Writer
It would make some sense if I explained it...but I'd have to know you very well. :)

No problem! I didn't expect anyone to see what I meant, because I'm not telling the whole story anyway. Let's just say that without this non-existent boy, the girl's life (*cough*mylife*cough*) would be much, much easier.

It takes a lot to make me cry, and I really wish it wasn't so hard. One of my poems, "Tearless", illustrates my feelings on the subject~

I'm sure you'll get to 100 eventually! :D

And yeah, I have come a long way...and I have a long way left to go.
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Student Writer
Okay. Knowing a lot about someone is sometimes an essential prerequisite before going off into long tangents or whatever. I hear you.

Ah, I see. Still a little confusing considering he doesn't exist but that does shed some light on it.

Sounds good, I'll look into reading that then! I can relate to you entirely, by the way.

Sure do. You know what you're doing, so keep at it! :)

(I'm slow with reading because I don't read often, so I'll look at your other pieces when the time comes)
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